Peer Review by Lee Fudge (United States of America)()

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By: Luna Lemon

why did she

she saw my tears moments before
heard my shattered heartbeat

my screams
as the ripped teddy bear laid by my side

but she didn't
she couldn't

the car's exhaust left a path
that I could never

if she never cared for me
then why do i find myself
always sitting on that doorstep
waiting for her to look back

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Peer Review

I doesn’t add anything for me, honestly.

The imagery creates a sad tome.

Reviewer Comments

I like how you wrote follow here.