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By: Sydni Whitfield
Message to Readers
Please review! Thank you
I never actually thought about daydreaming as a good thing. I slip in and out of a "dreamworld" all the time; I'm the kid who sits in the car staring out of the window and daydreaming. It was encouraging to see someone who values daydreams. I'm also surprised that you used more of an essay format. A lot of writing here is very informal, and this made for a pleasant change of pace.
You definitely could have expanded the part about coming back to reality. Remember, most of the people who will read this are writers. If we have problems with daydreaming, it'll probably be with knowing when to snap out of it. :)
This was an excellent piece: well-written, smooth, formal, yet personal. I could probably use this as inspiration for my school papers.