omicron7889

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Message to Readers

I honestly didn't really know what I was writing until I finished it, where I then went 'oh surprise surprise this is actually a poem about love didn't know I was capable of that' and that's what I'm delivering to all you beautiful people

Smooth Criminal #songtitlepoem

September 10, 2018

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Stole her heart on the Monday train
Left her standing in the rain
Heart lit afire with butane
The burning desire, she couldn’t sustain


Smooth criminal,
Smooth criminal,
A thief of valuables who didn’t think twice

Smooth criminal,
Smooth criminal,
She lost her guard to the highest price


Tuesday came as she waited by the rails
She couldn’t chase, there was no trail
Deluded with, tales upon tales
Never let go, to lose is to fail

And yet on Wednesday she waited still
A quickly melting iron will
From Wednesday to Saturday she repeated the drill
And it was on Sunday that her hope was killed


Smooth criminal,
Smooth criminal,
She closed her eyes when he rolled the dice

Smooth criminal,
Smooth criminal,
She lost her guard to the highest price
The song is Smooth Criminal by the 'King of Pop' (a.k.a. Michael Jackson)

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10 Comments
  • omicron7889

    don't hurt me... no more


    almost 2 years ago
  • aggressivebackflip

    what is love...baby don't hurt me


    almost 2 years ago
  • Corner Writing Club

    Hey! Since the week is drawing to a close, I just want to reminder you of reviewing assignments! Remember that when you're done, you must comment on the assignment piece so we know; I don't believe you've done that yet, although I could be misremembering. Anyway, just a friendly reminder!


    about 2 years ago
  • omicron7889

    Roger that.


    about 2 years ago
  • Corner Writing Club

    Reviewing assignments are now up! Please read them so you know which piece to review!


    about 2 years ago
  • omicron7889

    Thanks for coming up with such a great prompt!


    about 2 years ago
  • Corner Writing Club

    Thank you for contributing!


    about 2 years ago
  • omicron7889

    Hey thanks to both of you! Always a pleasure to read comments from two fantastic writers. :))


    about 2 years ago
  • The Great Gabs-by

    I love this so muchhhh!! This idea is really creative and the repetition is truly effective in this case. Keep it up ye:))


    about 2 years ago
  • nezi_nes

    'oh surprise surprise this is actually a poem about love didn't know I was capable of that'


    about 2 years ago