Peer Review by ollieollie (United States)

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the oxford comma

By: Onion3102


FREE WRITING

Who cares about the Oxford comma?
The dramas it creates 
It leaves only remains of mass destruction;
essays in a terrible state.

It's a stylistic type of writing
That is what they claim 
But when it comes to sophistication,
It's, sadly, just a bit of a shame.

The guy who happened to create it 
Herbert Spencer is the name, 
coined the phrase "survival of the fittest"
now that's something for the surname

It starts with some list,
unfortunate items line up.
Just to have a comma right at the end
come and mess it all up.

Bitterness, anger and tears
that's what's caused according to Grammarly users
this comma happens gives me nightmares
and I'm not trying to abuse her

Now I'm not trying to dis the comma
No, no, no.
Its just my perspective
It's something we need to outgrow.



 

This is a slam poem I didn't get to perform... Enjoy!

Message to Readers

Yea... the Oxford comma annoys me


Peer Review

Well, to start, I actually had to look up what an oxford comma was (I had no idea lol). I didn't know that it was stylistic thing; I had been taught that it was always necessary. Your slightly satirical tone made it enjoyable to read, and I was pleasantly surprised with how much you were able to fit into six stanzas.


What prompted this poem? Was it a specific instance, or a long buildup of frustration? I think a more in depth description on the effect it has on people would be a bit more engaging, but other than that this piece is pretty spot-on.


Reviewer Comments

I'm sorry this took so long! I read it a few days ago but didn't have time to write the review. Thank you for being patient. I'm usually not a huge fan of poetry, but this was an entertaining read. Your word choice was very clever.
I'm looking forward to reading some of your other pieces!