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Open to suggestions on how to make my metaphors leave a strong impression as well as being clear and well written
"Love tastes like a piece of dark chocolate, bitter but sweet at the same time." I love it because it's just such a great starting line(straightforward, fluid)!
My second favorite would have to be the words "dark chocolate". I really like your comparison of love to chocolate!
Your vivid and lively words dance through the feelings expressed of love, and what you feel love is and what it is like. Beautiful!