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This is so weird and oversimplified. Any thoughts would be great, yada yada yada.
I love the topic, and how you wrote as a protein/ex-mRNA in first person.
Maybe describe more what it's like. Describe the floating feeling? Or the feeling of the ribosomes reading the RNA (although, I must say it's kind of odd that it goes from mRNA to a protein, because they're two separate beings? Since the RNA is just a "barcode" read by the ribosomes, the RNA doesn't "turn into" the protein. I think... maybe not)? Anyway, maybe describe things like the E.R. and Golgi apparatus and more than simply "halls" and "room," add descriptors.
Okay, as a biology nerd, I was very drawn to this piece because of the name. I honestly love this.