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Any feedback is great.
I really like how you managed to make this a fantasy piece, and yet it sounds like something ancient cultures would have truly believed in.
I'd like to know what happens next! The story starts with "centuries ago," which implies that something has happened between then and now.
I'd really like to know about the culture of the people who live in Agnesia, but I understand that you can't give too much away ;) Good job and keep writing!