Peer Review by ElephantAirlines (United States)

Below, you'll see any text that was highlighted with comments from the reviewer.

Tap on comment to view. Using a mouse?

Hover over comments to view. On a touch device?

This is not how the story is supposed to go

By: RavensInkWrites


You aren't supposed to be the one in the grave
You aren't supposed to be the one with their eyes permanently shut
How did we get here?

Peer Review

It's so short, but it has so much meaning! The narrator is clearly able to express their grief in 3 short sentences.

There's so much more to this story that we don't know. Who died? What happened to them? What was their connection to the narrator? The depparted is clearly dear to the narratior.

Reviewer Comments

I feel like you could extend this poem into a longer poem about their relationship, and how one of them died. ^^