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Hi. I know it's past the 'peer review deadline' but any feedback you give me on this would be appreciated. Thanks :)
The description was nice. You made it easy to picture.
There is always some joealousy between siblings, that was relatable.
You relate it to your religion, but not entirely to how the incident actually affected you personally. That could have been nice.
You swtiched to talking about religion, which was interesting, but there could have been more of an ending to the story.
It's interesting, keep going!
Some of it could be a little more relatable. For example, I'm sure there are plenty of people on here who don't agree with your religious beleifs. It's good to express your own, but to make it more enjoyable for everyone to read, maybe acknowledge others as well? But overall it was a good story. I like your writing style.