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Hey! It’s Iris. Thank you for taking the time to read my piece! I’d love if you could review it, and help me out. I think my ending is a little bit weak and doesn’t do as great a job of wrapping up the piece as I’d like to, do if I could get pointers on that, it would be great, however any help at all would be appreciated. Thanks!
The shift within the piece was unexpected and effective. The opening piqued my curiosity, as I had no Idea what the narrative might be about.
I play many instruments, so the routine of lessons is quite familiar to me. The pain and joy of being a musician is evident.
I that this might need a tad bit more reflection. The main chunk of reflection is currently at the end, but I could possibly be spread throughout the piece.
It seemed a bit rushed; however, I think my own narrative may have this issue, because 1000 words just doesn't seem like enough. Still, it demonstrates how the narrator's relationship with music has evolved.
Understand the value in telling your story. Winner or not, getting a piece of your life on paper is a gift to yourself.
Make sure to check on perspective/pronoun continuity.