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PLEASE READ THIS REAL SLOW SO THAT EVERY LITTLE BIT SINKS INTO YOU PROPERLY. Wouldn't want you missing anything out. Enjoy!!! and feedback always appreciated:))
I'm not sure what I expected exactly, but whatever is was, reading this was definitely a nice surprise. Honestly, the whole thing was beautiful and interesting, this piece is absolutely AMAZING.
I don't think I'd change anything much, really, I think it's perfect the way it is.
Again, this is SUCH a beautiful piece and I love the beginning paragraph, as well as the repeated question 'Do you ever?'. The ending is perfect, the way you switched from present tense to past. Great job on this piece; looking forward to reading another piece from you. :)