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Message to Readers
PLEASE READ THIS REAL SLOW SO THAT EVERY LITTLE BIT SINKS INTO YOU PROPERLY. Wouldn't want you missing anything out. Enjoy!!! and feedback always appreciated:))
Delighted: I'm going to guess that you're writing from experience, and that you've actually felt most (if not all) these feelings and had these thoughts. In which case, I was like "Whoa. I'm not actually the only one who overthinks absolutely everything and wonders the meaning of life and purpose and blah, blah, blah." Surprised: I really don't think there was anything that particularly surprised me so I'm just going to skip this Moved: (see comment on last sentence) but really the whole thing honestly it's just really, incredibly moving to witness someone growing up. This format makes it seem like there isn't really a character, like you're just asking questions to the reader, but there is one that you've laced into the writing, they don't have a name or a gender but the character traits are everywhere, hidden for the reader to find and it's pretty amazing to watch the character change
I really like your format of a long paragraph then just a sentence by itself, it gives the piece a really interesting rhythm and adds to the impact that it leaves on the reader. The only critique I have (and this is really small, but I'm saying it anyway) is that the sentence "all the rash urges ebb away" seems a little too short compared to rest of the single-sentence paragraphs that you have, and it seems sort of detached from the rest of the piece. If you were going to make changes I would add something to that sentence or reword it so it was longer.
Sorry for my lack of punctuation in some places, I hope that doesn't bother you but that's sort of just how my mind works when I write reviews. I am really, really impressed with this though and I'm glad you told me about it because otherwise I doubt I would've ever ended up seeing it. Also I'm so glad you liked Windfall which is off-topic but I still appreciated your comment. Anyway, you did an amazing job on this piece and if you ever want something else reviewed I'd be happy to help :)