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Message to Readers
I don't know if I'll publish the rest here, but what do you think?
I love the voice you gave Vanessa Lunara; you made her both relatable and idealistic.
Even though I'm currently reading the newest additions, I think this first chapter may be my favorite, partly because of how much of the story it reveals with just a few short paragraphs and some dialogue. It really hooks the reader in.
You are a fantastic writer and I hope you continue this story!