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I quite enjoyed the very beginning. The first paragraph. The narration and flow were all extremely pleasant and made me think of something I'd read in a book.
I could relate to hiding in your fictional worlds, rather than living in the real world. Reality is harsh and cruel. Not all fictional worlds are cupcakes and hearts, but they're still magical.
I think it managed to be quite balanced. But perhaps in the end, it could've been a scene rather than the narrator kicking into the "typical teen journal entry in a movie" style.
It was kinda sad that the character pretty much never maid friends after Chiara, she did say she met some new kids, but pushed them all away. That was kinda unsatisfying, like the happy ending was lacking almost.
I can honestly see you as the winner. Your writing is better than mine! It's balanced, clean, and easy to enjoy. Your style is captivating, so that the reader just gets sucked in a keep going.
10/10!!! Good luck in HS or 8th grade..? IDK
(Also, I saw like a spelling error in someones talking, or somewhere at least, but I couldn't find it to highlight it for you. Sorry)