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The line that stands out to me the most is, "you were everywhere and nowhere." The reason this stands out to me is because this is really thought-provoking, and powerful. It makes you think. How can you be everywhere, but at the same time, nowhere. It truly adds to the poem.
I'm left with a feeling of longing, I want to know more. This poem was vague, and mysterious, but in a good way. You want to know WHAT exactly the author is referring to (is the author referring to a human? or is the author referring to something much deeper?) This feeling of wanting to KNOW more, for me, is especially strong in lines like, "You were gold first" and "I watched you hit the ground and shatter."
What inspired you to write this poem?
Very well written. Keep up the good work!