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The title pretty much sums everything up very nicely. It's a persuasive essay about how we need to stop comparing how successful we are to our peers and start seeing how well we compare with our expectations of ourselves.
Brutal honesty. You state everything very plainly so the reader never has to wonder what point you're trying to get across.
Last sentence in your fourth paragraph: I'd really love to see you delve deeper into this point you bring up. What specifically brings teens down this path? Pressure to take so many advance courses while juggling lots of extracurricular? Having to decide what you want to do for the rest of your life?
I really liked your essay. I found it very informative and I think you make some insightful observations.