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I like that you tell a story over the geography of the city, contrasting the city you know with ideals of traditional romance.
All the imagery and references to darkness, cold, and gloom! I'd love to see this explored a little more specifically--how and why to you seek to find positives from what might usually be considered reasons not to live somewhere?
It's hard for me to say, because I also live in Wellington and wrote a piece about it. However, maybe be more specific in general? You have an insiders perspective, you know what is north, and where the bucket fountain is relative to civic square etc., but your reader may not. How can you take them through your city without disorientinging them, so that they, too, can search for the magic you have found?
You have some really vivid and compelling turns of phrase here, which is going to make the final piece so bright and clear (even if it's in darkness and rain!)
The idea of magic and romance is an undercurrent in this piece. I think it would be more distinct if you could bring out those concepts slightly more explicitly. Overall, though, this was a delight to read.