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Message to Readers
thoughts and opinions, please! (:
I absolutely adore the wording you chose, it really sets the tone, and it's beautiful. Your descriptions paint a perfect picture in my head.
After reading this (even the ending, which was amazing!!), I would love to visit and take in everything you described. You are a magnificent writer.
Actually, the whole essay was very detailed. I don't think you need any more. :)
I wish you the best of luck! You're bound to go a long way in the writing world.
Have a nice day!