Below, you'll see any text that was highlighted with comments from the reviewer.
"A sea of colour on the ground." It's a unique and very effective description.
A bit refreshed. The image you've painted is very soothing, but perhaps some adjustments to the punctuation may improve the rhythm - perhaps I'm just missing the reason why you've put full stops at the end of every line.
Was the personification of leaves intentional, and would you consider continuing that idea?
Most of what I wanted to say is in the highlighted portions and the above questions.