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I love how stark the first line can feel. Many took this prompt on with either joyful mysterious air, but you did no such thing. This piece got right to the chase, it was blunt and quite good. You really prove that he flourishes on murder, with the perfect job that he does on each victim. I quite appreciate the whimsical lines that contrast with the whole theme of death and murder. But I have to say that my favorite part is the title -- "An Ordinary Job." I just love the contrast between the idea of what an ordinary job means and your writing, which makes it out to be just another job.
I would love to know why he only flourishes on one capability. What is his day job? What happened? What lead him to murder? What's his motive? Does he murder for someone, and if so who? Clients? A boss? Who does he murder anyway? What was his first murder? I feel like this piece was wonderful with describing his job, but I want to see a plot, I want to know who this man is, if that makes sense.
Now that you signed up, I have officially lost all hope for winning $100 like, ever. But in all seriousness, you did a fabulous job on this piece. I feel that it could most definitely be expanded on, which is great. Well done!