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Please provide any advice and tell me your thoughts. Did you like it? Are you confused? Do you have a deep understanding or connection? I'd really love to hear anything. :)
The part where the narrator says/writes, "But not mine." Why wouldn't the narrator want to be on a ship?
What do snowmen have to do with anything? Please explain. Does the narrator have powers? I don't get the part where the narrator goes in.
The story doesn't really have a climax. Please try to add one as you continue to edit this story. Overall, it's great, but needs some tweaking.