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This really is a great piece, and part of what makes it amazing is how it ties in a light attitude with seriousness; anticipation with lack;
I admire that the tone that this piece has. It is light, but the light mood does not detract from the point. Hooking, but not just entertainment.
You did very well tying in hunger with education; without food, we cannot grow, either physically or mentally. Growth is essential to survival.
If you expanded a part, I think it should be the call to action- what you want the reader to do. It is clear, but it could be even clearer if you ended with a call to action.
Additionally, perhaps you could expand how PlumpyNut is distributed. Is it volunteer run? Can I contribute? Is it a company, like Coke? Can I help start a distribution? Is it non-profit?
Anticipation. The description of the burger makes me anticipate having one.
Where else is there anticipation? Who is it?
How can I help someone whose anticipation goes unfulfilled?
This is really great, and you did very well keeping the point clear, yet not boring the reader or giving them a bad mood or feeling at the end, which can happen when talking about such a weighty subject. You are very good at keeping things enjoyable, yet profitable. Light, but deep.
Great job! I visited the link, but was disappointed that it went to more of a press release type site. Does PlumpyNut have it's own?