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I especially loved the line "And she loathed the woman". It was a great concise sentence with a ton of impact.
I'm definitely interested as to what happens after, but primarily I have feelings of confusion as to the credibility of Edith , as normally one would assume a heiress (at least to me) to be refined and well-taught morally and educationally, in order to continue the family line and make good connections or to handle the business themselves.
What were your biggest challenges in finishing this?
Sorry if I came off as a little bit harsh, so here's some positive feedback to even things out: You have an instinctive knack, for the most part, of how to hook readers and keep the story going smoothly without a ton of discrepancies. The story is fairly well fleshed-out , and I do understand the main character's personality at least a little bit through your writing. Had a lot of fun reading this!