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Message to Readers
This is a sort of poem.(It doesn't follow meter.) I normally don't do poetry but I thought I would give it a try. Feedback is appreciated!
“Sadness is ... leaving you with nothing but a bitter tang against your tongue.”
“Every feeling has a flavor,
Many have an aftertaste.”
Not only is this awesome imagery, but the second line stands out because the alliteration used in the first line is broken.
I love this piece!