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"This hero was Sayonara Man." You can't get more hilarious/ironic than this. The way you wrote this so seriously makes this even more funny. I need you to write more humor. These funny pieces are amazing.
Laughing but managing to keep it in long enough so no one thinks I'm crazy... I love how you end this piece so simply and yet strongly. It's possible the best part of the piece and gives the whole thing a nice tone and touch. The way you keep all the sentences pretty short also add to the piece nicely.
Did something inspire you to write this, or did you come up with it yourself? Also, I would try to very your words a little more. Other that that, I absolutely adore this piece,
Great job, and keep writing!