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i'm pretty proud of this tbh
What line doesn't? I'm particularly fond of the line found at what you've labeled "ii". This is an extremely poignant phrase, lyrical and yet, it remains harsh and unforgiving in a gorgeously worded metaphor.
I feel very caged- like the protagonist- but at the same time, vengeful, bitter, empowered. I have seen the light of freedom, and I will wait until I (as the protagonist) cannot be wronged again.
What inspired you to draw on this particular myth?
I have no words to describe how much I adore this. This is stunning. Beautiful, fantastic, a true work of art. You should be very very very proud of this piece because it's absolutely amazing. I aspire to tell this kind of story in my own writing one day. Please, keep up the good work!