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This is a little idea that popped into my head: what if this girl could travel through space-time, and arrive in another dimension? This is a really rough draft, so please, any feedback of any type is welcome. This is the prologue of my story, so more will be explained once the first chapter is writen. Also, please give me title ideas, because right now, I don't have a clue what to name it. Thanks, and enjoy!
"Ready or not, here I come!" I love this line. Not only is it a wonderful opening-line, but it really hooks me into the story.
Wonder. It made me think and ponder.
I really, really think this is a creative and great idea, and I can't wait to read more of it! Find out if her babysitter ever finds her, if this ability becomes a problem, etc,.
Hi there! I just wanted to say that this is a great piece of wrtiting you've got here! I eally like your idea and the way you wrote it, presented it, was amazing. Keep writing!