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I love this poem because it truly captures my emotions about the pollution caused by us. This poem speaks to me, as well as billions of people around the world.
I honestly have no idea - your writing was so incredible, especially considering your use of imagery, similes and metaphors. If anything, I would have loved a few rhetorical questions, but that's just because I personally adore them! Don't sweat it though, this is great writing.
Some of my favourite lines are "the kind of laugh that corrodes," "The girl's eyes are seismic; the world shifts" and "their apathy for her unrest" because it really creates the mood of the poem and allows readers to connect to your writing through you ability to make sentences flow.
You are an amazing writer. I have no doubt that one day you will achieve your writing dreams, whether it be writing competitions, or writing your own novel. Never give up!
Good luck for the competition!