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It felt a little disconnected, maybe? But I am left thinking about my own childhood: Had I had adventures such as these? My answer now is "no," but perhaps they seemed like such grand adventures back then.
Hm... I don't know, honestly. I put some suggestions for general things that could be improved about the progression of the poem, but as for language, I think you did a great job with the word choice and sentence structure; although I think using more metaphors/similes would be really fun.
"And she is left to realise that the imagination she once cherished
Now was mocking her for her gullibility and ignorance"
I feel like it really shows the loss of childhood innocence and is where the shift in tone of the poem begins. I also highlighted a few other lines I really enjoyed.
Your vocabulary and word choice is incredible. Keep it up!
It's super cool how you put the reality at the bottom of the child's imagination. I love how the reader can slowly but surely figure out the event being described. I thought it would be neat, though, to continue to progress the same story -- the same childhood, so that the reader could see the innocence of childhood slowly fading away. Also, make sure to keep use of commas at the ends of lines consistent (either always use them where there should be a comma, or never use them. I hope this makes sense >_