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"Let's play a fair game / No one with the upper hand / Let's play a fair game." I like the use of repetitive phrases here. I think it adds something very interesting the piece. It also strikes me as something which could be a song lyric, which I like.
I'm left feeling dissatisfied, because to me it seems like the person in the poem is a bit in denial, trying to ignore the problems of the real world with a temporary solution. I think this reveals something about the person in this poem, which is very interesting to think about.
Where did the inspiration for this piece come from? Also, how did you decide to put in in rhyme?
Very interesting piece. One thing I noticed is that the fourth stanza doesn't seem to rhyme, at least not when I read it. Consider revising so it rhymes, because it threw me a little and unfocused me from the poetry. All in all, nice job.