Peer Review by Kaitlyn ❄ (United States of America)()

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He Thought

By: f l o r a


PROMPT: 25 Words

He thought that the chains that bound him to his past would never be undone.
But hope helped him let go and live freely.


Message to Readers

Bleh.
I don’t like this and it suuucks.


Peer Review

"He thought that the chains that bound him to his past would never be undone." This first line is absolutely fascinating. It's so cool. It instantly leaves me wondering what happened in his past that left him so chained and broken. It is super intriguing and I love it.


You left it so open. The reader can really fill in the blanks with whatever they relate to and understand. I think that was so cool to do. It was such a great thing when you can leave enough space for your readers to relate and to fill in the blanks.


Reviewer Comments

This is really good!