Hong Kong

~on an indeterminate hiatus~

Message to Readers

Any feedback on the structure and/or syntax of the poem is very much appreciated, thanks!

Black mist

April 11, 2018

Seasons come and go
Unsusceptible to the passive mind
And time slips away
Like droplets on a waxy leaf

Where will I be?
What will I do?
So many questions

Split decisions.
Long-term plans.
Can they just rid themselves of my conscience
I’m sick of them already.

Outside, I see the veil of night drape over my shoulder
Nothing seems real anymore
Vision obscured, like thoughts.
My spirit wanders hopelessly
Trying to fit in the impenetrable fortress of reality and the world
Blank spaces substituting for lost emotions,
carelessly shoved into the recesses of the mind.

Honks of vehicles reverberating, pounding into my body
Animated conversations permeating around the halls
They mean nothing to a soul
Who is reclusive
Who is staring into the distance
Thinking about the gravity of something that can be so trivial, and yet so encompassing
Of the process that is life.


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  • nezi_nes

    Thanks Super0smitty!!

    almost 2 years ago
  • Super0smitty

    I love the way you formatted the poem and how the words just flow together !!

    almost 2 years ago
  • nezi_nes

    Hehe thanks Fox!

    almost 2 years ago
  • -Foxmillionaire-

    Great poem. I love your profile picture.

    almost 2 years ago
  • nezi_nes

    Wow, thank you so much for liking it!! I was a bit nervous about this poem 'cause it's quite emo haha

    almost 2 years ago
  • Sashbob2018

    This is absolutely incredible!!! Every word is so well chosen.

    almost 2 years ago