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It helps me to see from a different perspective. Empathy is very important to me, and I love reading things like this. Something that not only brings the writer's POV into the story, but also an "inanimate" object's view.
I don't think so. You did an amazing job as is! You push past humanity's POV, to another side of the story. :)
Wow.....this is an extremely hard question. I love so many lines in this poem. Each one is imaginative, and crafted with unique word combinations. :) I suppose I could just cheat and say the last one is my favorite, because it leaves the reader with a thought. Your beginning line is also very good at pulling the reader in further. :)
Superb! So many great lines in this piece! Keep up the fantastic work! Oftentimes, it's hard for the writer to come up with a meaningful ending that really makes the reader think. I don't know what your thought process for your ending was, but the result was excellent. :)
Keep up the unique descriptions, and POVs!!