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It's very sorrowful and wistful, and I can feel that. The poem is surreal and I love how you've shown that; the tone is one of my favorite parts about it.
No, not in my opinion.
I honestly can't choose. I would highlight every line if I could, because your descriptions are amazing.
This is so good! I love the tone and the way it tells a story.
You've done some very good work here. I'm awed by the end of the piece; the pacing is spot-on, and you get a sense of character just by what you've shown. I could picture everything. I love it!