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I would love for you to let me know your interpretations!
"...her white knuckled fists with fingers practically sown together grasp water when it still runs right through her nail indented palms..."
Sure. Being able to talk to her and find out more about her would be exciting. She is someone I want to know more about and to be friends with.
I really like how you turned the one-sentence explanatory, into one sentence, but found a way to put more in there! Yet you left it still very mysterious.