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This is a piece I've been working on for a bit, and I would love to hear what you guys have to say about it!
The way you so casually started, then smoothly, yet suddenly, wound down into the beautiful strangeness of it all.
The way you explained how the character's "breath even and rationed...leg muscles warm and humming." I think that was the part where I felt like the character.
A dark starry night. In a neighborhood near a lake or ocean. Nightly silence(except for the crickets). What helps bring the setting to life? The way you didn't exactly explain everything around her, but you did in a way that lets your imagination take a twist on what you think the setting is like.
I can say many things(all good!), but if I had to pick one that explains my excitement in your writing this piece and sharing, it would be: "Keep writing! You are amazing!"
This, overall, is a beautiful(yeah, I know I've said that a lot, but it's true!)piece. I want to know more, and can't wait to see how the story turns out!