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Feedback would be really appreciated! :)
How you explain the pain that the character felt and the thoughts that raced through her head.
The way you explained pain, emotions, smells, and sights made it all feel very real.
In an alleyway, perhaps in a large city. I especially loved how you explained the monster near the end, how "fire crackled" from its mouth.
No. I think it's perfect!
Keep writing! This is really awesome, and I would love to find out what happens and how!
Great, fantastic job!
You did an amazing job writing this and keeping things running smoothly and gracefully. Your character has a bit of mysteriousness that makes me want to keep on reading and reading!