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Wow this piece is so beautiful! The opening line is a really effective and as is the closing line, which leaves me too with an urge to travel the world and live everything all at once.
I like the idea of it being a 'hiccuping dream'. You don't describe specific places or experiences, but you describe sensations or feeling, like the idea of walking through a teeming city. It makes it very personal to each different person who reads your piece.
This piece definitely made me feel 'fernweh' and I think your piece perfectly described the word and the feelings that surround it.
I really love this piece! Great job.