Dream

Vin

United States

(Formerly Laika, but I wanted a more gender-neutral username.)
"The normal human consciousness is not equipped to deal with the pillars and suspension cables of the universe."

Message to Readers

I don't write a lot of poetry, but this came to me last night while I was trying to sleep, and I had to write it down. I'm not sure if there's more to it or not. Feedback would be greatly appreciated.

Midnight Musing

March 13, 2018

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Living in a warped city of lies,
Where the cracked and damaged sky,
Weeps glass down onto bent heads,
Hunched shoulders hiding under worn threads,
The shattered pavement mirrors my skin,
What kind of world is this we are dying in.

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5 Comments
  • Dani A. Remlap

    I love this. I actually have a piece of the same name, coincidentally. Great work!


    8 months ago
  • Plausible.Poems

    The words just come together so nicely :)


    9 months ago
  • Kahasai

    This is very vivid. Good job, but don't forget the question mark at the end.


    9 months ago
  • Vin

    Thank you!


    9 months ago
  • RainAndSonder

    I think, in the last, "we are" would be better as "we're", but that's just my opinion. This is really amazing. Great work!


    9 months ago