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I became interested when I read the phrase, "In the past the label 'mentally ill' was highly stigmatized..."
Mental illness and depression are not to be glorified.
The real-life descriptions. Reading about what depression really looks like.
I think that I would put a few more facts in there. Perhaps put a statistic in there of how many people actually look at social media pages like the ones you have described.
Continue writing. You're doing well.
In your piece, do you put a distinction between mental illness and depression? Are they two separate things? If they are not, please separate them.
I would also check the punctuation and the capitalization. I think that there were a few commas and capitals left out. Carefully correcting punctuation and capitalization will make it look much more professional and formal.