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All respectful comments are welcome. I hope you enjoy, God willing, as much as you can . . .
I really connected with the emotions expressed through the characters' words and actions.
By the things Ikorov says, especially. I really love how he's so brave and diligent, that he won't tell another person because he wants to be respected and treated like a man, and no less. He's very inspirational!
This is pretty obvious, but it takes place in a dungeon, or jail cell. Even though you didn't give tons of aspect on the sounds and feeling of being in the cell, you did everything else so well that those were not needed whatsoever; I could hear and feel and smell it from what you did say.
I think is this a beautiful piece, and I wouldn't want it changed.
Keep it up, Hanan Adi(can I call you Hanan?)! Your work is absolutely amazing, and has inspired me, and I hope that others will also be inspired.
Practically every line spoken, even those of description, are definitely quote-worthy. Reading this was like reading one of the most memorable stories, one that everyone is or should quote and love, because of its divine beauty.
Overall, this is beautiful, and something I want to read over and over again for the sweet, chocolate-melting-on-tongue emotions that I felt. Keep it up! You are amazing!
Last thing, I want to thank you for writing a fantastic review on "One Night's Notice". That made me smile, think, and made my day all the better, 100%. Thank you for that!
Have a great day and never stop writing!