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Message to Readers
Here's chapter one of Borders. If you haven't seen the prologue yet, I suggest that you read it. What do you guys think of this part?
I really liked the dialogue between the two characters. It seemed real, like two teenaged girls were really there. It didn't sound forced or written at all! very good job. Even the teasing, which is usually a harder thing to pull off.
I was hooked. I hope you come out with installments later on??? I went to check my seat belt right after the mustang started speeding up, lol. I didn't feel creeped out, but I was hungry to read on so that I could be creeped out. :)
Will you publish the rest?
the highlighted section there was done really well, but it makes it seem as if Lora is not familiar with Jade's house. If Lora is always picking her up, I think she would be a little more familiar with it. Perhaps the numbers are on a mailbox and they shine quite brightly, making it easier to recognize the house in the 7:30 darkness.