camlily

United States

hi there

Message to Readers

I know this poem is really bad but I would love to hear your thoughts on what I should do to improve it! Love you all and have a great rest of your day/night <3

Make-Believe

March 6, 2018

FREE WRITING

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You think it's a make-believe world. 
You think it's okay to play pretend.

You think that you're the ruler
Of this make-believe world. 
You think that others believe you 
When you feign kindness.

But this world is not make-believe
And you're not fooling anyone.
You're the only thing that's fake here.

You pretend to be nice to me
You pretend to feel sorry for me 
But there's no reason why you should.  

Because you should feel sorry for yourself
To be living in this make-believe world
Where you're the make-believe queen 
And nothing else is real.
 
sorry for this sucky poem #extremewriter'sblock
:) have a wonderful day/night!

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3 Comments
  • CreativeAngel

    I feel ya girl. lol
    Me half the time tho


    over 2 years ago
  • camlily

    Oh my goodness thank you so so much!! That really meant a lot to me <3 <3


    over 2 years ago
  • rainandsonder

    "To be living in this make-believe world, where you're the make-believe queen" agh I love that line so much. It's not a sucky poem at all, it's actually really good. You can feel the emotion behind it. Great job!


    over 2 years ago