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The description reveals that the character has lots of courage, and that she can persevere even in the toughest times. Even though the queen is a prisoner, she still has a powerful walk, revealing that she has lots of determination and pride.
My favorite line is the last sentence. The line gives such a strong image of the queen walking with chains yet still having the look of a queen. The contrast of the way that she looks externally and the way that she feels internally is very vivid.
Great job on this work! The descriptions are so vivid, and I'd definitely want to read a longer version of this story if you decided to expand on it. I look forward to reading more of your works on Write the World!