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Message to Readers
This is the beginning of a longer piece I'm working on. Any feedback would be helpful.
The girl not wanting to be touched.
I want to know who the girl is and why she won't let people touch her.
It starts out in a park, probably during spring. Must I go into more detail?
It would be cool if it was a book.
This piece is great, please keep writing?
I WANT TO READ THE REST!