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Anything. Just to have known you have read it is heart-warming.
The line that describes the little girl's expression--"...perplexed with her brows risen high up on her forehead, mouth parted in astonishment, and eyes wide with something awfully similar to love" was exceptional. The vivid imagery created a clear picture of her face, and I got a sense of the character's childish wonderment.
I'm guessing the unlikely pair was the red ballon and the hail storm. The writer did a fantastic job at making the pairing believable/acceptable but still surprising/unexpected. The pairing seems conflicting on the surface, but the writer incorporates the two elements so well, so that I felt this pairing was just *right* The contrast made it all the more beautiful.
This was a very strong, absolutely lovely piece. There was so much subtext behind the little girl's actions, and I was so intrigued by her fascination with the balloon. I couldn't help but wonder about her backstory and what caused her to fixate on this red balloon, despite the injuries it caused her. The atmosphere you created here was somehow preternatural--in the best way.
I enjoyed this piece so much that you've inspired me to use this prompt for a scene in my novel! I hope to read more of your work soon!