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Anything. Just to have known you have read it is heart-warming.
That would be "...eyes wide with something awfully similar to love." I could picture it perfectly in my head when I read it, which is always a good sign with writing!
Also I would like to give a special mention to newbie word 'pmmmmhed.' What a show-stopper! It made me think of old-fashioned comic books :)
Given that the two ideas are so different - and never seen together - you managed to make it seem so natural. It wasn't at all contrived, and could have fitted perfectly into any good book or film. Actually, I hope you write more on this because I'd love to know what a bright read balloon is doing floating around in an ice-storm! Sounds like magic...
This is such a beautiful piece of writing! I can't wait to see what you do next!