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I really like the line "Danny, one of those anomalies, did decent in school." The dichotomy between Danny being irregular in some way and yet being mediocre in school is so interesting and such a great way to pull in the reader and make them keep reading.
I'm left wanting to read even more of the story! The way that you set up the character of Danny and the place of Nerd City makes the story so intriguing. I'm left feeling so eager to read more and to see what happens next, because I already am interested in the main character and in the plot.
Why is Danny an anomaly? I know that this question will probably be revealed later on in the book, but I'm so curious to know now! I'm also wondering about Nerd City - the name of the high school is Gandalf High School, so maybe that's some indication of what things are like at Nerd City, but I would like to know more about what it's like living there, which I'm sure will also be revealed later in the book. I'm really interested in learning more about both Danny and about Nerd City, which is an indication that the author does a great job of introducing their story in a way that makes the reader eager to continue reading.
Great job with this Chapter! The story was set up really well, and I can't wait to read more!