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Message to Readers
Any feedback if is welcomed. Please review so I can make my flash fiction better. Thanks for reading this flash fiction and God bless you.
Great job! You did a very good job grabbing my attention and portraying the emotions the main character was going through.
You did this successfully throughout the parts in the piece where you never fully explained what was going on with the mysterious monster within. You made me wonder, "Who is this "it" character inside?" and "What is the main character going through? Is it something that happens often, or something inevitable that the main character has been trying to hold back her entire life?"
No, not really. You had this all perfectly balanced.
Great work! This has great potential, and it was a unique idea. I like the concept and was intrigued from the start. Keep it up! ;3
You may want to work on sentence fluency. For example, understand the uses of the comma, and try not to make run-on sentences. Embrace the power of what is left unsaid! :D