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the very strong start to the story which drew me in and definitely made me curious to read more. the menacing tone of the narrator was also a great hook for me, and is one of the things that i found really interesting.
“there is not one single entity that does not think about me ripping them from the living.” this line was very clear in its implication in that the subject was death or at least the grim ripper. i understood almost immediately who the subject of this story was. well done!
no! i felt there was a little too much description, but it didn’t make the story too chunky so that’s fine!
this story is really well executed! i felt genuine fear when i read this story, so you’ve done a really good job!
this was such a pleasure to read! thank you!